考研 英语作文 热门话题范文：网络的近与远
　　As is shown in the picture the humans (加who are)divided alone keep contact with each other by internet. Every one owns a computer ,which is their mainly(mainly为副词，用来修饰动词;mean为名词，需要用形容词来修饰，可改为main) mean(改为way或means，mean为“平均值，意思”；而means为“手段，方法 ”) to contact out(改为with the outside world).In addition,there are spider net between everyone(改为it just like a spider net),which lead the people alone.The picture revealed(时态保持一致，改为reveals) a current social phenomenon that people dependent(改为depend，从句谓语部分应用动词) extravagantly on the internet rather than the normal conversation. The spider net is a great metaphor of the soul-wall(改为the gap between two hearts),which alienate(改为alienates，保持主谓一致)us,meanwhile,it is a net relate(改为relate to) us. What”s more(加逗号) worrisome(改为the worrisome thing;worrisome为形容词，不能做主语) is that they not only contact with strangers with(改为by，by表示“通过某种方式”) the net,but also families. It is a dangerous game! Maybe,it would make the families destruction(改为destructive,注意make sb./sth. + adj.的正确使用).In my opinion,though the association in internet itself gives little cause for criticism(句子表意不清，建议改为the internet itself should not give much criticism),people should use it in a proper way. Chatting with strangers or distant fellows by computer is OK,but it is indispensable for us to use it in(改为with) close friends. To have a good result,the society should encourage the people to focus more on the real world and the people themselves should enrich their lives and thoughts.
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current ['kʌrənt] 想一想再看
n. (水、气、电)流，趋势
adj. 流通的
联想记忆 X 单词current 联想记忆：
currr跑，发生+cnt→跑的→流动的;潮流
enrich [in'ritʃ] 想一想再看
vt. 使富足，使肥沃，添加元素

social ['səuʃəl] 想一想再看
adj. 社会的，社交的
n. 社交聚会

destructive [di'strʌktiv] 想一想再看
adj. 破坏性的，有害的
联想记忆 X 单词destructive 联想记忆：
de坏+struct建立+ion→有破坏力的
alienate ['eiljəneit] 想一想再看
vt. 使疏远，离间，让与
联想记忆 X 单词alienate 联想记忆：
alien外国的－把别人当外国人－疏远某人
indispensable [.indis'pensəbl] 想一想再看
adj. 不可缺少的

encourage [in'kʌridʒ] 想一想再看
vt. 鼓励，促进，支持
联想记忆 X 单词encourage 联想记忆：
courage（n 勇气）
association [ə.səusi'eiʃən] 想一想再看
n. 联合，结合，交往，协会，社团，联想
联想记忆 X 单词association 联想记忆：
as加强＋soc社会+ion→社团；联合
addition [ə'diʃən] 想一想再看
n. 增加，附加物，加法
联想记忆 X 单词addition 联想记忆：
add增加，ition名词后缀
conversation [.kɔnvə'seiʃən] 想一想再看
n. 会话，谈话
联想记忆 X 单词conversation 联想记忆：
con共同+vers转→[两个齿轮对着]一起转→谈话+ation→谈话